英文日記~幫我看有沒有文法或者單字錯誤的 - 狗

By Thomas
at 2009-03-15T00:00

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我因為想要考英檢
聽、說、讀我都能夠自己努力
唯獨寫就不太容易
所以我就強迫自己寫英文日記
希望能加強我的語文能力
還麻煩各位英文高手
能加以指點導正
哪邊用字適合，或者改成哪個字更好!
倘若您有即時通訊
願意給予我一個指導
那我會很感謝妳....盡量告訴我哪裡要更正..
不然我看你們更正好的
我實在不了解哪裡有問題
感覺就好像再看文章一樣..
沒有收穫儘可能告訴我哪一句的哪裡不好..
修正成怎樣會更好
加上什麼，文法應該如何等等...
我想知道我錯誤的原因...
而不是你當我的翻譯><
拜託各位了!!!!
我實在沒辦法花好幾萬補習
只能請求各位能幫幫忙我...
如果前面已經有人回答了，你能夠更改的更為洽當，那我也會選擇妳，如果前面那位已經更改的非常完美，那就給予他一個支持吧^^
題目：TO PROVIDE DOG FOR FUNNY? I DON'T THINK SO!
養狗很有趣? 我並不這麼認為!
Wednesday,I keeping a dog,it a lady two month age.
That day noon,I drove a car to go to mountain,took it to my grandmother,but the mountain road is rough,so the poor it to vomit a way.
after the night,my mother saw a dog to say:my god! You have no money to buy the food.
my father said:oh! it name is Barack Obama,then it slept in my room tonight.
But tonight it bark a hours again and again,just like a clock…three、four、five a clock is bark to quarrel me up.
I think to say:god! I have a class tomorrow….
So that,go to class sleap on Wednesday.
Friday morning However,I don’t go to class,but go to duty.
My mother to me said:the dog to quarrel,it bark to quarrel me up at five a clack.
So I to close it before slept,this morning,to crow the six a clock,so that I so tired on Saturday.fairly I don’t slept to drove
a car,otherwise a matter is so biggest.
Now,oh!the dog to bark me,but I teach it these day,it to seven a percentage drain,wish it wise more!
星期三，我認養了一隻小狗，她是位一個月的女生。
那天的中午，我開車去山上，帶著她去找我奶奶，但是山路崎嶇，可憐的她到達目的就吐了。
晚上回家以後，媽媽看到狗說：天阿! 妳沒有錢買食物了。
爸爸說：呵呵!那就叫她歐巴馬好了，就這樣她在我房間睡了一晚。
不過晚上她一小時叫一次，好像報時一樣...三點、四點、五點在那嗚嗚嗚的把我吵起來。
心理想：老天阿! 我還要上課阿...。
就因為這樣，星期四上課只有睡覺的份而已。
然而到了星期五早上，不需要上課，不過我去上班了。
我媽告訴我說：狗吵死了，我五點就被她嗚嗚嗚的吵起來。
所以我昨天睡前特定把她關起來，不過今天早上，還是六點就被他挖起來，以致於星期六的課我有點累，還好開車沒有睡著，不然事情就大條了。
到了今天，噢!又被她咬一口了，還好教他這幾天，十次已經有七次會在我指定的地方如廁了，希望往後能夠更聰明才行!
Update:
我程度很差..
要不是真的想學
還真的沒勇氣寫(明知道寫了也很差..)

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By Ivy
at 2009-03-17T02:51

Keeping A Dog Is Interesting? I Don’t Think So!
養狗很有趣? 我並不這麼認為!
This Wednesday, I kept a puppy which is a girl and just one month old. At noon, I brought her to the mountains to meet my grandmother by car. However, the road was so rugged that she vomited when we arrived. Poor she! After going back home, when me mom saw her, she said, “My goodness. You don’t have enough money to buy her food.” But my dad just laughed and said, “Well, we can call her Barack Obama.” And then she slept in my room that night. Nevertheless, she cried once every hour, just like telling the time. Because of this, I felt harassed by her cries and I just shouted in my mind, “Oh, my goodness. I have classes tomorrow. How can I fall asleep?” As a result, I always nodded in my all classes on Thursday. Furthermore, on Friday morning when I didn’t need to go to school, I went to work. When I went back home, my mom complained to me about her cries. She said that she woke up at five o’clock in the morning just because of her cries. So I decided to put her into the cage/ encage her. Nonetheless, I still woke up at six this morning because of the same reason－her cries. Therefore, I was so tired during class today. The only fortunate thing was that I didn’t doze off when I drove my car. If I had fallen asleep when driving, there would have been an accident. Moreover, I was bitten by her. Oh no! But the thing which comforted me was that most of the time she could urine at the place where I wanted her to urine. Hope she will be smarter in the future.
星期三，我認養了一隻小狗，她是位一個月的女生。那天的中午，我開車去山上，帶著她去找我奶奶，但是山路崎嶇，可憐的她到達目的就吐了。晚上回家以後，媽媽看到狗說：天阿! 妳沒有錢買食物了。爸爸說：呵呵!那就叫她歐巴馬好了，就這樣她在我房間睡了一晚。不過晚上她一小時叫一次，好像報時一樣...三點、四點、五點在那嗚嗚嗚的把我吵起來。心理想：老天阿! 我還要上課阿...。就因為這樣，星期四上課只有睡覺的份而已。然而到了星期五早上，不需要上課，不過我去上班了。我媽告訴我說：狗吵死了，我五點就被她嗚嗚嗚的吵起來。所以我昨天睡前特定把她關起來，不過今天早上，還是六點就被他挖起來，以致於星期六的課我有點累，還好開車沒有睡著，不然事情就大條了。到了今天，噢!又被她咬一口了，還好教他這幾天，十次已經有七次會在我指定的地方如廁了，希望往後能夠更聰明才行!
2009-03-21 23:10:41 補充：
After going back home, when me mom saw her, she said, "My goodness. You don't have enough money to buy her food." But my dad just laughed and said, "Well, we can call her Barack Obama."
2009-03-21 23:11:44 補充：
Because of this, I felt harassed by her cries and I just shouted in my mind, "Oh, my goodness. I have classes tomorrow. How can I fall asleep?" As a result, I always nodded in my all classes on Thursday. Furthermore, on Friday morning when I didn't need to go to school, I went to work.
2009-03-21 23:12:21 補充：
She said that she woke up at five o'clock in the morning just because of her cries.
2009-03-21 23:12:47 補充：
The only fortunate thing was that I didn't doze off when I drove my car.
2009-03-21 23:13:30 補充：
看不清楚、跑出怪字的地方重新再打了一下。 Sorry~沒注意到^ ^"

By Edith
at 2009-03-17T03:57

You have serious English grammar and usage problem. It may be easier to pick up a grammar book and start reading it. As that way, you will have get a total understanding of the entire grammar concept rather than hit and miss.
2009-03-15 11:28:27 補充：
Sorry, typo.
As that way, you will have a total understanding of the entire grammar concept, rather than hit and miss.

By Carolina Franco
at 2009-03-18T08:41

你這篇日記麻煩可大了
沒有文法可言
要改可以改
可是就像你說的
改了你又不懂
你若真要認真改的話
可以問我吧....

By Joe
at 2009-03-16T11:14

我想先問問你的能力是在哪
是初級都沒過還是要考中級?
然後之前學英文幾年
你的英語經歷
自認為有沒有基礎?
2009-03-16 22:10:29 補充：
我覺得日記對你來說還有點太難
我建議你去書店買基礎句型的是題本回家作
建議你買一本朗文的叫[給中學生的文法與句型]
太難的話可以買簡易一點的
反正就是句型的練習
還有劍橋的文法書初級的
你要是認真的看完一定有效
不然旭如出的AZAR 也有效的

英文日記~幫我看有沒有文法或者單字錯誤的 - 狗

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